Elevator Pitches

An elevator pitch is a short speech, intended to garner interest, provide information, and delivered concisely, all in the amount of time of an elevator ride. In my research, everyone agrees that having an elevator pitch is one of the most important things. (The most important is having a marketable product.)

I have prepared mine...and I had no idea that it would take as long as it did! Here it is:

What if Jane Austen lived in a galaxy far, far away? I’m writing a New Adult Jane Austen Space opera. The first book, The Bennet Determination, centers on Elizabeth Bennet. She is apprehensive of the Regents de Bourg, who, after deposing the heir, constantly wrench freedom from the populace. The Royalists, determined to place the heir back on the throne, slowly diminish in strength. Elizabeth must choose between the Royalists and the Regents. Between her sense of right and her family's safety. Between the death of tyranny and the death of peace.

Is it interesting? Is it clear? Is it short enough?